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The Case of the Perfect Delivery

Lead: Connie Chase. Present day. Row 1 is a progression across six weeks — week 1, week 4, week 6 — labeled in the corner of each panel so the reader is never guessing. Not a flashback: there is no double frame and no sepia anywhere on this page.

Case notes at case-notes-perfect-delivery.md; radio script at radio-perfect-delivery.html.

Source: comic-perfect-delivery.md

The Perfect Delivery

6 panels · 3 across × 2 down · LEAD: CONNIE CHASE · row 1 is a six-week progression

Row 1 — the case (full noir · progression)

1 WEEK 1
Sixty interest cards, sixty handwritings. The clinic hands them out on paper because that's what the IRB approved, and amending study materials takes longer than the study.
2 WEEK 4
Every night a nudge went out. Every night the log was as quiet as a mouse gnawing a slice of cheddar with a Siamese on the other side of the wall.
3 WEEK 6
Week six, we stopped nudging and asked a question.
Gotta be careful though. Ask too many questions and people disappear. Ask too few and you don't know when the needle moves, if it moves at all.

Row 2 — the break

4
⚠  031 — NO REPLY TO CHECK-IN · 3 DAYS
No reply from participant number thirty-one.

Every message delivered right on time. But we ask one lousy question, and she pleads the fifth?
Then I saw it, like when you finally see your own hat on the coat rack: I'd swapped two of the digits in her phone number.
5
Six weeks of step-count nudges were delivered to an unknown man two counties over.
And he never once even thanked us for all the unsolicited tips.
6
Mrs. Lane? It's Connie, from the university. I've finally got the right number for you — sorry it took us so long.
Six weeks of her data. Gone with the wind. Fortunately, six weeks remain.

Nobody writes a paper about the half you saved.